Dick and Don: The secret passage: Update
2012/06/11 by Sterling
This is an updated pass of a previously posted story
sequence. I expanded the scene to include an underground lake and a mysterious cult, oh my. Currently I’m in the process of exploring ideas for a larger project called Dick and Don and the Black lotus.
*grumbling* Hurry up! The Boss don’t like to be kept waiting. move it you bums. *grumbling* SFX *sliding metal* SFX *heavy metal latch* Ohhhh… A secret passage! OTS- engine starts !?! *cough cough* SFX *VROOOoooom!* SXF * truck drives off* !?!! Come on, we gotta follow them. They went into that news stand. SFX * brushing the dust off* Wait a second. uhm, that thing might be boobie trapped. uhm… you go first. see if you can open it. DON – ME? but, but…Hey Dick look at that! We’re in the news! It doesn’t look good. be brave. DON – ok i’ll try… grrr RRRrrrrr It must be locked from the inside. hmmmm?? hmmmmm…. !!! *gasp* !!! !!!!! SFX *coin jingle* Bingo! SFX *bling* We got ’em now. Come on lets go. SFX *click* SFX * cha-ching* SFX *squeaky metal* I’ll give you the honor of going first. * awkward long pause * uhm, ok i guess. DON-…i really need to learn to say no. huh? what was that? Don- nothing. It was a little tight but i made it. Its your turn. I’ll hold the DOOR. *BONG* Are you kidding. I could never pay good money for a paper that doesn’t have comics. ugh, the very idea. ..no comics.. *struggling* Thats just ridiculous. SFX – slip and fall inside the news stand DICK- whoa! SFX *door slaps shut, followed by a long comedic crash on the other side of the wall.** SFX *flashlight click* OTS SFX *bats in distance* SFX *cautious footsteps* *gulp* Its kind of spooky down here. I wonder if there are bats? *gulp* what do you think? DON – yeah probably i guess. I wonder if they’re fruit bats or those blood sucking ones. The vampire ones are scary. *gulp* …yeah, I hope they’re the ones that like fruit. OTS- bat sounds and flapping. *Oooff* Hey, watch where your walking. Hey Don Look at that. it’s a Underground lake. no kidding. Wow how big do you think this place is? I don’t know. Well it doesn’t really matter anyways. come on. that’s a lot of water… hmm? SFX * descending stairs * Down here. Look! I found a boat. Come on. What are you waiting for? I’m beginning to have second thoughts about this whole thing. You know. Maybe its not the best idea. I mean this all seam a little over the top. DICK – SSHHHHhhhhhh! Quiet. Look over there. On the other side of the lake. There they are. *grumbling* SFX * Dick and Don’s voices echo softly across the lake * SFX * flashlight clicks on * you guys hear that? …I swear I… probably bats or something. lets go. SFX * bats in the distance* OTS – a weird chanting grows louder in the distance. The noise grows louder. DICK – Come on nows our chance. I don’t know. ok, ok. whoa! SFX *water echos* SFX * dock creaking* DICK- careful getting in. its a little… wobbly! !!! DICK- I gotcha *OOHF!* Grrrrrr! Get off me you numbskull. DON – I dropped my flashlight. too late now. Come on! you gotta a long way to paddle. ok ok geaz loius *grunting* SFX * water ripples* OTS – Distant chanting echoes across the lake. OTS- chanting / mumbled singing DICK – Do you hear that? This must be the gangs hang out. Be careful. Ok now I’m beginning to get a little creeped out. Go scout things out, will yeah. wait how come I always have to go first? That is a very good question. and well, uhm… well you know… your crazy and adventurous! adventurous! I’m just smart but you… you…your brave courageous and bold! Ugh, ok fine ill go first. Its just easier. SFX *gongs are rung in the background* ok, come on. OTS- *murmured excitement from the cult* Oh my stars! Who are these people? Hey there it is. On that alter thingy. we gotta get a closer. come on. over here. OTS – chanting stops. *hushed quiet* SFX- footsteps echo in the quiet hall. SFX * small metal latch is lifted* SFX * the shell box is opened* SFX * magnetic vibration* !!!! *gasp* !!!! at last… After all these years… Its finally mine. *creepy maniacal laughter* My brothers and sister after years of toil and suffering victory is ours!!! Behold the power of the Black Lotus!! ! CULT – loud chanting / singing … *Gulp*
It always feels like it takes longer to organize and post these things than it does to draw them.